Thursday, May 17, 2012

Antonio Essay and new marking scheme


Check out this essay by Antonio regarding diets for children. Look at the errors and refer to the marking guide (on the main toolbar of the blog, just next to 'How to use this blog'). Here it is below.


Parents should let their children eat what they want.
If you start a discussion with that statement surely you would get two clearly defines parts, children part who said yes and parent part who said no. But who is rigth and who is not? The importance of a well-balanced diet has been remarked by a lot of experts  who said that it is the key for a good health.
The reason of why parents choose what children have to eat is simple, because what do you prefer a recent  home made baked cookie or a cookie made by industrial way? I think is an easy choice, and I hope everybody have chosen the first option so the same happen with  any kind of food, parent  prefer children eat the home made food before the fast food because they know how it was made.
Other reason for not let children choose the food is the fact they would not eat home made food because of they are not able to cook it and in addition children are lazy, most of them, and personally I do not trust they would cook any food as soon as they came back after a school day, furthermore some children will be eating avery moment at the day and others won’t do it.
If at the end this essay works for something I think is for getting a conclusion of it, and my own conclusion is that children do not know the responsabilities of taking care of themselves for that fact parent have to choice children foo however they have not to forget some days it is good to have a  breath and eat some unhealthy but tasteful fast food.
Antonio Machado




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